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the journal of Michael Werneburg

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Kokubunji, 2025.05.16

After last week's surprisingly positive review of one of my stories, I asked the "Anthropic" AI called Claude about another of my short stories, which is currently not published to this site. This is what it had to say.

"This story is ambitious in scope and has some strong satirical elements, but it feels less polished than it could be. Let me break down what works and what might need attention:

What works well:

Areas that feel less developed:

Technical issues:

The core concept is solid - it's an environmental parable wrapped in space tourism satire with genuine wit. But it needs tightening. The first story felt more focused and controlled, while this one seems to have more ideas than it can cleanly execute in the space available.

The ending, where the captain dies from therapod attacks on the very type of planet their company helped create through negligence, is grimly effective. But getting there feels a bit mechanical rather than organic.

It's definitely worth developing further - the satirical voice and environmental themes have real potential."

Challenge accepted, Claude!

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